Tips For Staying Healthy-draft 1
How do you stay healthy? I think many people have their own ways to stay healthy. There are some tips for staying healthy that I think. First, we should have a good habit of food, for example, to eat a lot of vegetables and fruits. Second, excise is important, we have to excise very often, and it can make us healthier. Finally, if we want to stay our healthy, have a good sleep is necessary. The tips of staying healthy are very simple, but if we didn’t do those tips definitely, it also without results.

7 Comments:
At 7:28 PM,
Samantha*霓∥ said…
but if we didn’t do those tips definitely,
didn't 是不是要用現在式
At 7:38 PM,
FawnYma said…
1."I think" there are some tips for staying healthy 我覺得I think放前面比較順
2.excise 這…這什麼啊? 好好笑喔!妳的er咧?
At 7:38 PM,
梁宜靜 said…
1..to eat a lot of vegetables and fruits->to不用加
2.. excise ->exercise
3..we have to excise very often->前面要加連接詞!!
At 10:56 PM,
Butterfly said…
1.There are some tips for staying healthy that I think我覺得I think 擺最前面比較順,但我不知這樣文法有沒有錯啦
2.First, we should have a good habit of food, for example, to eat a lot of vegetables and fruits. 我覺得we should make it a habit of food而且for example那邊最好大寫,另成一句,要不然句子有點過長。
At 9:37 PM,
許雅婷 said…
1.excise拼錯了
2., have a good sleep is necessary應該是having a good sleep
At 6:41 PM,
Butterfly said…
我還沒改完,繼續
1.have a good sleep is necessary用having
At 4:42 AM,
Tina said…
excise??
excise is important->To take/get exercise is important
"and"we have to excise very often
to stay our "healthy"->health
but if we "didn’t"->為何要用過去式?
have a good sleep is necessary->sleeping well is necessary
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