A Dream I Had (draft 2)

Many people usually have dreams; sometimes it’s sweet; but sometime it’s very horrible. When I was four years old, and my brother was still a one-year-old baby. One day, I had a dreadful dream. I dreamed that I was at the dock, and I saw my brother fell over the sea. I was scared and didn’t do anything. I wanted to save him, but I couldn’t. Cried with tears streaming, and then my brother was drowned. At the same time, my father panicked called me to get up, asking me what happened. I was still suffering from the shock, keeping crying. Maybe the dream wanted to tell me that I should take care of my brother. Although we usually quarrel now, I think that I still don’t want to lose him.

A Dream I Had (draft 1)

Many people usually have a dream; sometimes it’s sweet; but sometime it’s very horrible. When I was four years old, my brother was still a one-year-old baby. One day, I had a horrible dream. I dreamed that I was at the dock, and I saw my brother fall over the sea. I was scared and didn’t do anything. I wanted to save him, but I couldn’t…I cried with tears streaming, and then my brother was drowning. At the same time, my father panicky called me to get up, and asked me what happen. I was still suffering from the shock, keeping crying. Maybe the dream wanted to tell me that I should took care of my brother. Although we usually quarrel now, I think that I still don’t want to lose him.