Making decisions(draft1)
Growing up means making my own decisions. My age is old enough that I can be responsible for my own decisions. I’m not a childlike girl like before anymore, because I’m growing up. I’m much more independent, and I don’t need to rely on other people, I can do myself. Therefore, it should be start to learn make decisions by myself.
The hardest decision that I ever made was going to the cram school. I don’t like studying if nobody pressed me to study, but if my parents pressed me too much, I don’t like, either. So I decided to go to the cram school, and it’s okay that I hate them instead to my parents. I also can study harder than I study alone. It’s kill two birds with one stone.
The hardest decision that I ever made was going to the cram school. I don’t like studying if nobody pressed me to study, but if my parents pressed me too much, I don’t like, either. So I decided to go to the cram school, and it’s okay that I hate them instead to my parents. I also can study harder than I study alone. It’s kill two birds with one stone.

8 Comments:
At 6:15 AM,
Celia said…
...it should be start to learn "make" decisions by myself.
應該用"making"
I don’t like studying if nobody pressed me to "study"
如果改成"nobody pressed me to do this"感覺會比較順
At 6:22 AM,
FawnYma said…
1. I’m not a childlike girl "as I used to be" anymore
2.I "should be" much more independent, and I don’t need to rely on other people.
我覺得 I can do myself.可以分開寫
3."I" should start to learn "to" make decisions by myself.
4.and it’s okay that I hate them instead to my parents. 怪怪的…
At 8:49 AM,
Samantha*霓∥ said…
1.anymore, because I’m growing up.>>不用逗號
2.and I don’t need to rely on other people,"instead",I can do "by" myself
3.and it’s okay that I hate them instead to my parents.>>這句有點難懂
At 6:09 AM,
Butterfly said…
1.I’m not a childlike girl like before anymore, because I’m growing up. 那個because前面不用逗號
2.it should be start to learn make decisions by myself.
應該should start就好了,而且learn後面要ing
3.and it’s okay that I hate them instead to my parents.那個instead 後面要加of,而且用it's okay很怪,用I think it's better that
4.內容有點過短,而且還是老問題,你的句子一直過長,一直用逗號,而且連接詞有點貧乏,可以嘗試把句子結束,用適當的連接詞重新開始
At 5:09 AM,
Ryuka(暐) said…
I’m not a childlike girl like before anymore, because I’m growing up.
because前面不用,吧
and it’s okay that I hate them instead to my parents.
這句的意思是??@@
At 5:48 AM,
許雅婷 said…
1. I’m not a childlike girl like before anymore這句稍微修改一下
2.it should be start to learn make decisions by myself.應該是I should start
At 7:36 AM,
梁宜靜 said…
it should be start to learn make decisions by myself.->怪怪的!!
instead to ->instead of
At 8:35 PM,
Tina said…
because前面不用逗號
it should "start" to learn "making" decisions by myself.
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