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Sunday, September 23, 2007

A Dream I Had (draft 1)

Many people usually have a dream; sometimes it’s sweet; but sometime it’s very horrible. When I was four years old, my brother was still a one-year-old baby. One day, I had a horrible dream. I dreamed that I was at the dock, and I saw my brother fall over the sea. I was scared and didn’t do anything. I wanted to save him, but I couldn’t…I cried with tears streaming, and then my brother was drowning. At the same time, my father panicky called me to get up, and asked me what happen. I was still suffering from the shock, keeping crying. Maybe the dream wanted to tell me that I should took care of my brother. Although we usually quarrel now, I think that I still don’t want to lose him.

8 Comments:

  • At 10:15 PM, Blogger Samantha*霓∥ said…

    When I was four years old, my>>, and my..
    and I saw my brother "fall" over the sea.>>fell
    and asked me what happen.>>happened

     
  • At 10:21 PM, Blogger FawnYma said…

    1.I wanted to save him, but I couldn’t"."應該用句號就可以了
    2.panicky是形容詞,要用副詞喔!
    3.and asked me what "happened"
    4. I should "take" care of my brother

     
  • At 6:25 AM, Blogger Ryuka(暐) said…

    I should took care of my brother.
    要用"take"

     
  • At 8:16 AM, Blogger Butterfly said…

    1.第一句那個dream可以用複數

    2.then my brother was drowning.應該是was drowned

    3.my father panicky called me to get up, and asked me what happen. 那個panicky是形容詞要用副詞修飾那個and asked可以用asking就好了

     
  • At 3:35 AM, Blogger 許雅婷 said…

    1.what happen要加ed
    2.should took care 是take

     
  • At 4:28 AM, Blogger Celia said…

    Maybe the dream wanted to tell me that I should "took" care of my brother. 應該是原形 take

     
  • At 8:10 PM, Blogger 梁宜靜 said…

    1..I had a "horrible" dream->因為前面用過了..要不換一個會比較好..
    2..what happen->happened

     
  • At 6:47 AM, Blogger Tina said…

    what "happened"
    that I should "take"

     

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