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Wednesday, May 23, 2007

The Computers (draft-1)

Computers play a more and more important role in our daily life. It gives us many entertainments, for example, as we know many teenagers like to play the on-line games, and we can surf the Net to know the latest news. We also can use the computer to communicate each other, such as chat with friends, and use the Skype to call the abroad people.

Personally, I have a liking for computers. First, even if I don’t face to face, I still can chat with friend by computers, it really convenient. Second, I can call my mom if she goes to China when some time on business. Then, I can relax myself by surfing the Net. To be sure, the personal computer has become a very good companion we can't do without.

7 Comments:

  • At 10:14 PM, Blogger FawnYma said…

    1.as we know many teenagers like to play the on-line games, and we can surf the Net to know the latest news. 這段怪怪的,改一下
    2.We also can use the computer to communicate "with" each other
    3.even if "we" don’t "meet" face to face, "we" still can chat with " each other"
    face to face 是雙方,所以用兩個人比較好
    4.it "is" really convenient.
    5.if she goes to China on business. when some time 可以刪掉

     
  • At 6:46 AM, Blogger 許雅婷 said…

    1.it really convenient.應該要is
    2.if she goes to China when some time on business.這句怪怪的

     
  • At 10:09 PM, Blogger Ryuka(暐) said…

    even if "I" don’t face to face
    要用we唷!
    在文章裡把Internet打出來應該比較好吧

     
  • At 5:49 AM, Blogger Butterfly said…

    1.such as後面要加名詞,而且不要一直逗後,把句子結束重新再寫新的,這樣會覺得很長

     
  • At 7:53 AM, Blogger 梁宜靜 said…

    communicate "with" each other
    it "is" really convenient

     
  • At 6:02 AM, Blogger Tina said…

    communicate "with"
    it "is" really convenient

     
  • At 8:31 PM, Blogger Samantha*霓∥ said…

    if I don’t face to face,>>這句聽起來怪怪的
    if she goes to China when some time on business.>>some time 不用

     

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